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Post by zippykaufman on Jun 5, 2015 5:12:28 GMT
WOOT WOOT!
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Post by veronica on Jun 8, 2015 18:33:18 GMT
The Party Illusion Blackout Sketch Scene begins at a house party with loud music, everyone is just staring at their phones looking bored.
Party goer: Hey guys picture time!
Everyone instantly acts like they are having time of their life the second the photo is done they are back to their phones.
Cut to Girl at home scrolling through instagram, sees party photos.
Girl at home: Damnit I should have gone, looks like so much fun.
Delusion Girl Blackout Sketch
Scene starts off in apartment with two women having a little get together
Girl #1: Hey How was your date yesterday?
Girl #2: Let me tell you, it was PERFECT, we instantly clicked and he was just so interested in learning about me, he even asked about my family.
Cut to doctor’s office Doctor: Do you have any history of heart disease, members of your family?
Cut Back to Girls Night Girl #1: He even got a little naughty we may have gone to second base *giggles*
Cut to doctor’s office Doctor: Alright I’m just going to perform a routine breast check for lumps.
Cut Back to Girls Night Girl #1: He immediately asked me out again at the end.
Cut to doctor’s office Doctor: Alright so I’d like to see you back here for a checkup in a week
Cut Back to Girls Night Girl #1: Did I mention he’s a doctor!
Both Girls Squeel in excitement
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Post by lisaw on Jun 8, 2015 19:04:20 GMT
YEAH!
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Post by zippykaufman on Jun 8, 2015 20:11:53 GMT
* I love the Party Illusion sketch as is, but an idea of an alternate ending is to flip the girl at home. Give her someone (1 or 2 people) to play off of. They see the party photo & exclaim, "Glad we didn't go to *that* party- it looked really lame!" Then they go back to their phones (and we discover that they actually would've LOVED the party). I hope that made sense, but if it didn't, just remember that the sketch is hilarious as-is.
* I was thinking about the Delusion Girl, and for me, the height of the sketch isn't the 'second date' beat, but the 'breast exam' beat, because sex and stuff. This may turn it into less of a 'blackout' and more of a 'sketch,' but this is what I'm playing around with in my head:
- Four women get together all Sex & The City like, with the other three asking our heroine about her latest date. - Someone asks how the conversation was. The beat with the family still fits here, but for an alternate take, our heroine can say that he was great at conversation and sounded so intelligent, at which point our doctor can say something like, "You know, ::insert complicated-sounding disease here:: is a very serious condition..." - Someone asks "Do you think you two will go out again?" at which point you play your original 3rd beat here. - Someone says, "Forget all that- What I want to know is...did you kiss him?" Our heroine then says something like, "Better...we got to second base!" At this point, we cut to the heroine, spread eagle with her back to the camera (as if in stirrups), and the doctor says "Okay, this is gonna feel a little cold..." and then the sketch plays out with the "Did I mention he's a doctor?" button.
...Or you can just ignore everything I said & thank your lucky stars I'm on the other side of the country.
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Post by juliemcfadden on Jun 9, 2015 4:10:17 GMT
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Post by juliemcfadden on Jun 9, 2015 4:41:26 GMT
Roofies black out run ) Open on a man and woman at a bar Rob: Can I buy you a drink? Rachel: (smiling) Um, Yeah, thanks. Rob: Can I put a roofie in it? Rachel: Umm..NO, God! Rob: Okay, well, can we have sex later? Rachel: Ugh, Just roofie me... 2ND Open on a man and woman waking up in bed Rachel: (confused, freaked, disheveled) Oh my God, What happened? Rob: Oh, I roofied you... Rachel...Ugh, honey! We've been married for 3 years. You don't have to roofie me anymore! 3rd Open on a old man and old woman sitting on a porch, drinking ice tea. You see the man (rob) trying to put a pill into the womans (rachel) drink. Rachel: Honey, again... you can't even get it up. Rob: For old times sake... Rachel: Oh.. anything for you. **Not sure of the last one.. I am definitely open to suggestions )
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Post by jerry on Jun 9, 2015 5:00:26 GMT
I think both the selfie-party and the roofie sketches are awesome and along with Jon's musical, you guys will have a full day. However, only because Kat mentioned it, I'll post my sketch up here as well. Also, I attached both sketches as PDF which are way easier to read. I actually think the elevator one would be easier to pull off. You can download them here: Produce.pdf (22.43 KB) Strangers on an elevator.pdf (19.81 KB) INT SUPERMARKET PRODUCE SECTION - DAY JIMMY wears a grocery store apron and is finishing up with a customer. The produce manager (just called BOSS) stands nearby with an inventory clipboard. Jimmy hands off a watermelon to a customer. JIMMY Just remember, you take good care of her, and she'll take good care of you. The customer accepts the watermelon and gives Jimmy a somewhat baffled gaze as she moves on. BOSS Jimmy, can I have a word with you for a sec. JIMMY Sure Boss. BOSS Jimmy, remind me again where you worked before you joined us. JIMMY A-1 Used Auto Sales. Cars for every occasion and persuasion. BOSS Right, right. And I guess they did things a little different then we do here at Century Market. JIMMY How so, Boss? BOSS Well, it isn't really necessary to try and "sell" the customer on groceries. They need food and they come here to buy it. JIMMY Okay, got you. BOSS Let's try a little role playing. Say I'm a customer. JIMMY Okay. Beautiful day for some fresh-squeezed orange juice. BOSS Okay. Now see what you did there. It feels like you are trying to get me to buy oranges. JIMMY Oh right, okay. BOSS Let's try again. Excuse me, can you tell me where I can find the iceberg lettuce. JIMMY Iceberg Lettuce? You don't want no iceberg lettuce. Look, for about the same price, I can fix you up with some spinach. It's rich in iron and a better source of fiber. Jimmy has really jumped into "huckster" mode. The boss is totally dismayed. JIMMY (CONT'D) And, don't mind me for saying so, but you look like you might be in the market for something a little more exotic. Let me at least show you the arugula. It's Italian, don't you know... BOSS Jimmy. Jimmy. This isn't really working out. I'm going to have to take you off the grocery floor. From now on you will be wrangling the shopping carts and helping customers with their bags. EXT SUPERMARKET - LATER Jimmy walks along side a customer who clearly wishes he would go away. JIMMY Look, I ain't sayin' anything will happen to this shopping cart. I'm just saying for a small investment in undercoating, it will protect your precious cargo. No? What about the sport package I was telling you about?
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Post by Kat Kirkpatrick (Admin) on Jun 9, 2015 20:22:13 GMT
Hi Guys!!! I'm so happy that this forum thing works! Great suggestion, Zippy! We've still got a few people who need to join so I'll send them emails today. We need to create a pre-production checklist ASAP. The more lead time we have, the less stressful for everyone. SO, if you have people/equipment/magical abilities in the areas we talked about--- a. Videographer b. Sound c. Locations d. Set design e. Makeup f. Editing g. PAs (although we can PA for ourselves if everyone is not acting in every shoot) h. Craft service Please let us know ASAP!!! I'd love to have the list done before the weekend. My thoughts on which/how many blackouts to do this go around... we'll be shooting in a living room-isn environment for Jon's sketch, so I think that we should only consider shooting a sketch set in a living room this time. I'd rather be done early than run out of time and leave that day with footage still to shoot. Adding a day is not easy or cheap. My vote is for Veronica's "Party Goer" this time. The party can be in a living room, and we'll just wrangle a bedroom for the shot of the girl. What say you guys? We can get ALL of these shot at some point, it's not a now or never kind of deal, I just don't want to go too crazy the first time we try to produce something together. Please post your resource list ASAP (or let me know that you don't have resources, which is fine, too), and let's nail down which blackout we'll do this time. You guys are awesome!!! Very exciting to see this coming together. Kat
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Post by Kat Kirkpatrick (Admin) on Jun 9, 2015 21:05:48 GMT
Notes from Kat on blackouts: "Party Goer" Love it as-is. Only suggestion, if it doesn't sound too clipped coming out of someone's mouth, is to shorten the Girl at Home's line to just "damn it, I should have gone." "Delusional Girl" Totally agree with Zippy. I think this would be an awesome full-on sketch. The beats are great, I'd just make the breast exam the last beat because it's the most ridiculous. Love the idea of setting this in a restaurant or a cafe, Sex in the City style. The character could be like Charlotte but totally out of touch with reality and totally desperate. "Roofies" I think it's great the way it's written. For me, it might be funnier if we made the man silent. The woman, then, is totally in control of wanting to be totally out of control (and he's somehow less rape-y). Here's what I'm thinking: Rachel: (holds up drink) Cheers. Thanks for the drink. Rob: (smiles knowingly/deviously) Rachel: You know, I saw you put a roofie in this. Rob: (looks alarmed) Rachel: (knowing smile) Well played. (chugs the drink) Rachel: What happened last night? Rob: (smirks and shakes his head) Rachel: Honey! We've been married for three years! You don't have to roofie me anymore. Rob: (very obviously putting roofies in Rachel's drink) Rachel: Really? You can't even get it up anymore! Rob: (looks at her smiling with pleading puppy dog eyes) Rachel: (chugs the drink) I never could resist you. Rachel could then fall hard to the floor and die. Just a thought. Like I said, love it the way it's written, too. "Elevator" Really funny! Would be really easy to film, too. I'd kind of like to see one of the women run off the elevator at the end before the suspected farter gets off, holding her mouth and puking. The other woman could yell at the suspected farter, "you're an animal! She just finished chemo!" The REAL farter could look up from his newspaper and say "dick." "Produce" If I were writing this, I'd make it a series of blackouts. The first one could have a pimply-faced young manager telling Jimmy, "look, they're in a grocery store. They're going to buy something. It's not like used cars." Jimmy could pretend he understands but clearly he doesn't. Then you just map creepy used-car dealer scenarios over food. For example, (to an elderly woman) "You're gonna regret not buying the Centrum Silver. A late-model beauty like you has to protect her undercoating, ya know?" Or, as he chases a young mom and kids to their car, "What do I have to do to get you into this spinach? I've got to get it off the lot today." Etc. Stuff like that. Short and offensive.
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Post by lisaw on Jun 9, 2015 22:26:24 GMT
Notes from Lisa on blackouts:
Party Goer - The only thing I'd like to see different is to start in the girls bedroom so the audience too is under the illusion that the party is bumpin'. We see her scroll through some instagram photos, bummed out, then we're taken to the party where the big reveal happens.
Delusional girl - I also agree with Zippy! Very funny full sketch. Also, very funny blackout. I'm happy with all the suggestions so far. Playing with heightening and "where do we go next" is very fun for this sketch.
Roofies - love it as is. An idea for the 3rd beat:
----------- Open on old man and old woman sitting on a porch, drinking ice tea. The old woman (Rachel) is talking on, and on, and on about nonsense. The old man (Rob) goes to roofie his wife, per usual, but gets distracted by his wife's inability to shut up at her old age and pay attention to him. He contemplates her, then his roofie, she doesn't stop talking.
Old man puts roofie in his own drink, looks at his wife and smiles. ------------
Produce - Love the concept and the suggestion of making into a series of blackouts. Again, simple heightening pulling in big funnies.
Elevator - I too like the simplicity. Love Kat's suggestion of making the suspected farter into more of a suspected murder - really taking the simplicity and making it super and unnecessarily dramatic. Another thing I thought might be funny is if we really feel this guy get worked up about making sure everyone knows he's not the farter. So as was already written: He gets off, misses his chance to say something and others comment about how gross he was. THEN one of the girls lets one rip and she acts like no big deal with a short "sorry". Rest of elevator also acts like no big deal, says it's "okay".
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Post by JT on Jun 9, 2015 22:37:37 GMT
* Party Illusion - I like it as is. Veronica, maybe write a few different-but-similar final lines, and we'll see which one plays better/is funnier during editing? (like we'll film "Damnit I should have gone, looks like so much fun." as well as "Dammit, I should have gone."
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Post by Kat Kirkpatrick (Admin) on Jun 9, 2015 23:07:57 GMT
Ah, the beauty of video. We can edit "Party Goer" both ways and vote on which we want to post.
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Post by Kat Kirkpatrick (Admin) on Jun 9, 2015 23:35:05 GMT
Hi again! It just dawned on me that some of us might want a quick primer on who does what on a set. If you already know all of this stuff, please disregard. But if you wonder what words/phrases like gaffer or DP or Art Director mean, this is a quick and easy explanation.
http://www.projectcasting.com/tips-and-advice/crew-jobs-every-film-crew-position-job-description/
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Post by jerry on Jun 11, 2015 2:22:53 GMT
For what it's worth, I went back to the original scripts and, for the most part, I think they are great the way originally written. I think The Party Illusion Blackout Sketch is perfect and could be told in just 10 or 20 seconds -- which is both remarkable and under-represented in the Funny or Die world. The shorter line Kat mentioned, I think is better. I really like Delusion Girl the way it is too. However I guess the best "build" would be to have the breast exam at the last beat. But then maybe the button is really "Guess what? He's a doctor!" So if it doesn't organically restructure, maybe it doesn't matter.
I like the dialog in Roofies. It gives both characters a chance to build their, well, character. I totally picture Bill Hader as the guy. I also think you could get "Roofie Guy" as a recurring character. (Uhhh... a psycho date-raper with a heart of gold?). Once we know he is the roofie guy, you could play Lisa's idea out with the same or a different female. It could just take place in a bar, and he decides to roofie himself to avoid the monotonous conversation. I think "Roofie guy" can work as long as he either always gets permission, his plot backfires on him, or somehow he changes his mind.
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