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Binge
Jun 9, 2015 23:53:13 GMT
Post by Kat Kirkpatrick (Admin) on Jun 9, 2015 23:53:13 GMT
This thread is the place to post "Binge" and your notes on "Binge." Thanks!
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Post by JT on Jun 10, 2015 22:56:32 GMT
Binge
By Jon Thompson
Jon, Chris, Guitar Player, Rachel, Amanda, Mrs. Thompson, Father Timothy, Dr. Rosenbaum
At each song break, guitar player enters the scene background, and exists when music break is over. Jon sings all verses solo except the finale.
Phone conversation. Both Jon and Chris are in different apartments
JON: Hey, Chris, what’s up?
CHRIS: Hey, you still up for some beach volleyball today?
JON: Heck yeah, man. It’s really nice outside.
CHRIS: Cool. Let’s meet in Hermosa at 10.
JON: Alright, see you there. [Puts down phone. Notices something on the TV]. Ooh, new season of Daredevil.
[Song]
It’s great big world outside I know,
But here inside are my favorite shows
It’d sure be nice to see the sun,
But I ain’t going out till this season is done.
Thru my window, I can see the trees,
But I’m staying inside… cause I love TV.
In Jon’s apartment. Jon is in front of the TV as Chris enters
JON: Come in, it’s open.
CHRIS: Dude, what the hell? Why’d you bail on me yesterday?
JON: Oh, man. So sorry. I couldn't stop watching Daredevil.
CHRIS: You stayed home and watched the entire season in one day? Dammit, Jon, we needed you out there. The game came down to the wire.
JON: Have you ever seen The Wire? They say it’s like the greatest TV show ever made.
CHIRS: Wait, what?
[Song]
Gotta pile of books that I should read,
Maybe go back to school for my PhD.
I wanna help the orphans down in Mexico,
But I haven’t ever opened my Rosetta stone.
There’s a much better person that I could be,
But I never will… cause I love TV.
Rachel is now in the room. Chris is looking in the cupboards and fridge
RACHEL: Holy shit, Jon. It smells terrible in here. You got to crack a window.
CHRIS: You have no food in this entire apartment. You've completely lost your mind.
JON: I’ve heard that the second time you watch Lost, it all makes perfect sense.
CHRIS: No, don’t! That show has 8 seasons!
[Song]
There’s nothing in my fridge but I don’t care,
Gonna stay right here, in my favorite chair.
I should probably get up and start to clean,
But I can’t pull away from this 60-inch screen.
Important things are waiting on me,
But I can’t move… cause I love TV.
RACHEL: Don’t you have a girlfriend?
[Song]
Do I still have a girlfriend, I don’t know.
She’s been replaced by HBO Go.
I’m not sure if my parents are still alive,
The only family I need is Amazon Prime.
So many people that I should see,
But I don’t need them… cause I got TV
Jon’s mother and priest are now in the room. Amanda, a coworker, enters holding some papers.
AMANDA: Jon, we need you back at the office. The Croosler account is in jeopardy.
FATHER TIMOTHY: I haven’t seen you at the service in a long time, my son. Don't ignore your faith.
MRS. THOMPSON: Or your mother.
CHRIS: Or your friends.
JON: Friends?
All: No!
[Song]
I haven’t been to work in at least 10 days,
To pay for Hulu Plus, I withdrew my 401k.
I’d rather stay at home on Sundays and binge,
Than go to church and confess my sins.
I pray to God that He have mercy,
I’ve lost my soul… cause I love TV
Dr. Rosenbaum is now in the room. Everyone listens to the doctor give his prognosis
DR. ROSENBAUM: Due an extended period of extreme inactivity, his body has deteriorated to such an extent that his organs have essentially given up and are shutting down. He has literally seconds to live.
[Song]
So many things that I wanted to be
But it all went to hell… cause I love TV
[Song – All]
So many things that he wanted to be
But it all went to hell… cause he loved TV
Jon dies in his chair. Each person reacts to his death (physical ad lib).
MOM: My baby!
AMANDA: Hey, there's a new season of Orange Is The New Black. Alt Hey, they released a new season of Orange Is The New Black.
DR. ROSENBAUM: Oh, my favorite.
Everyone is excited as they settle down in front of the TV, forgetting about Jon.
END
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Binge
Jun 11, 2015 0:02:56 GMT
Post by Kat Kirkpatrick (Admin) on Jun 11, 2015 0:02:56 GMT
Awww... JT is a tiny kitten!
I think this is great. You've got the whole cast in, too, which is perfect.
In the last verse, I wonder if "To pay for Hulu Plus, I withdrew my 401K" is too much of a mouthful to be understood. Maybe "To pay for Hulu Plus, I drained my 401K"? Or not, I guess it will depend on what it sounds like when you sing it.
As for the button, I think it would be funny if whoever plays your mom freaks out a little, takes your pulse, and yells, "he's dead! My baby is dead!" Then, someone else (maybe the priest?) could say, "look! It's the new season of Orange Is The New Black" and everyone, including your mom, could totally ignore you and stare at the screen (the camera).
I think this one will be really fun, can't wait to film it!
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Binge
Jun 11, 2015 2:15:37 GMT
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Post by JT on Jun 11, 2015 2:15:37 GMT
Kat - Crap, I didn't include the button in my post! Thanks for remembering. Yes, I intend to have the "OITNB" line at the end as the new button. I'll add it in there later tonight and then lmk know what you think of it
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Binge
Jun 11, 2015 4:05:08 GMT
Post by zippykaufman on Jun 11, 2015 4:05:08 GMT
I love how this sketch is shaping up- I think it's going to be really good.
What if, to zero in on the game of the sketch even more, there was something said right before each Jon's TV show lines that triggered him? I know that makes no sense, so I'll use the 'Lost' beat as an example:
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RACHEL: Holy shit, Jon. It smells terrible in here. You got to crack a window.
CHRIS (opening the fridge): You don't have any food in here? Have you *lost* your mind?!
JON: I’ve heard that the second time you watch Lost, it all makes perfect sense.
CHRIS: No, don’t! That show has 8 seasons!
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The Daredevil beat would stay as-is, but the other ones would change slightly to give Jon more of a leaping-off point to mention the shows.
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Jun 11, 2015 16:54:31 GMT
Post by lisaw on Jun 11, 2015 16:54:31 GMT
Looks great! Very excited for this  The addition of the button at the end should be a nice out and give it a more concise end feel. Zippy makes a good suggestion with the triggering/justification lines - would give the game more fun punch UNLESS the goal is to make Jon seem like a complete zombie and in his own TV world. In that sense, no, Jon would not even hear the triggering line. I'll leave that up to the creator to decide! |
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Post by JT on Jun 11, 2015 17:40:47 GMT
Updates:
- Added button at the end where everyone notices OITNB
- Added a small, probably unnecessary note that Bruce (the coworker) is holding some papers. Basically, think of the parents, Bruce, the girlfriend and priest as looking like easily-identifiable caricatures (Bruce is wearing a tie with a dress-shirt w/ sleeves rolled up)
Kat - I like "withdrew" b/c fortunately somehow does work when I sing it, and it fits well as a term closely related to 401k so it helps usher in the word "401k". Anyways, you're right that I can tweak a word or two when we record the song if somethings not working
Zippy - I hadn't thought of that trigger word idea... I am picturing that Jon is in a zombie-like state (getting progressively dimmer and zombie-ish) always in front of the TV. BUT the trigger word could 1) make the show choices seem less arbitrary, and 2) add more comedy where the "friends" accidently/inadvertently trigger Jon to zone-out/start singing. And each new person doesn't know about the trigger, so first Chris triggers it, then Rachel, then the Priest... Good suggestion, I'm going to mull it over and try to write it
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Binge
Jun 12, 2015 0:33:49 GMT
Post by veronica on Jun 12, 2015 0:33:49 GMT
I think the line below in red is kind of confusing cause you tell him that you're cancelling plans to watch netflix but then later he asks you why you didn't show up even though you said change of plans.
CHRIS: Cool. Let’s meet in Hermosa at 10. We’ll play for a few hours then get some lunch…
JON: Uh, Chris. Change of plans. Season 2 of Daredevil just came out on Netflix. Gotta go…
[Song]
In Jon’s apartment. Jon is in front of the TV as Chris enters
JON: Come in, it’s open.
CHRIS: Dude, what the hell? Why’d you bail on me yesterday?
JON: Oh, man. So sorry. Daredevil was amazing. I couldn’t stop watching.
Maybe you could try something like this so Chris really doesn't know why Jon didn't show up.
CHRIS: Cool. Let’s meet in Hermosa at 10. We’ll play for a few hours then get some lunch…
JON: Awesome, see you later.
Jon hangs up phone and glances at tv.
Jon: OOooo new season of Daredevil
[Song]
In Jon’s apartment. Jon is in front of the TV as Chris enters
JON: Come in, it’s open.
CHRIS: Dude, what the hell? Why’d you bail on me yesterday?
JON: Oh, man. So sorry. Daredevil was amazing. I couldn’t stop watching.
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Binge
Jun 17, 2015 19:05:24 GMT
Post by JT on Jun 17, 2015 19:05:24 GMT
Veronica: great point! I will adjust those lines
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Jun 18, 2015 22:56:57 GMT
Post by JT on Jun 18, 2015 22:56:57 GMT
Updates made to script on 6/18:
- Incorporated Veronica's note to have Jon notice Daredevil *after* he has ended the phone convo w/ Chris
- Incorporated Zippy's note to have each verse be triggered by something said, except for Daredevil and the verse after "Don't you have a girlfriend?"
- "Oh, my favorite." line in regards to OITNB is given by the doctor instead of the Priest. Not a big deal, but I like this better b/c the doctor can go from delivering serious news to being exciting by OITNB, and is less clichéd/more subtle somehow than a Priest being goofy.
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Jun 18, 2015 23:03:37 GMT
Post by JT on Jun 18, 2015 23:03:37 GMT
Also, I reached out to an intellectual property lawyer friend (as if a lawyer can be a friend to anyone, am I right? solid) b/c someone cautioned me about getting a copyright before publishing a song so that nobody steals it. I'll let you know what I learn
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Jun 23, 2015 16:41:50 GMT
Post by jake on Jun 23, 2015 16:41:50 GMT
Can we post a cast list of who is playing what in BINGE along with the blackouts?
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Binge
Jun 23, 2015 17:55:57 GMT
Post by Kat Kirkpatrick (Admin) on Jun 23, 2015 17:55:57 GMT
Looks great! Here's the cast (subject to change if anyone can't make it):
"Binge"
Lisa: Rachel
Jon: Jon
Kat: Mrs. Thompson
Jerry: Mr. Thompson
Julie: Amanda
Jake: Chris
August: Father Timothy
Niko: Bruce
Matt: Guitar Playing Guy
Veronica: Dr. Rosenbaum
"Party"
Veronica: girl who didn't go to the party
The rest of us: the people at the party
Once everyone has confirmed their availability (and we know if we have to make any changes) I'll email you about wardrobe. "Binge" needs a white lab coat for Dr. Rosenbaum (Veronica) and a clergy collar for Father Timothy (August), so if you have either of those things please let us know.
Thanks!
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Binge
Jun 23, 2015 20:13:00 GMT
Post by JT on Jun 23, 2015 20:13:00 GMT
Updates to Binge:
- AMANDA is now the coworker. The girlfriend character is removed
- MR. THOMPSON character is removed. MRS. THOMPSON has his line now.
- Small change to the end of FATHER TIMOTHY's line ("faith" instead of "God")
- Small change to DR. ROSENBERGSTEIN's line ("seconds to live" instead of minutes. Makes more sense)
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